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Night. A time for sleeping and for dreaming. Once the inky blackness descends, everything changes. Shadows become twisted and warped; tree branches reaching with claw-like fingers, a discarded bundle of clothes could be a person crouching in the bushes. Noises become amplified, footsteps echoing in the eerie silence. Bathed in the light of the moon and the twinkling stars high in the velvet sky, the world is mysterious and beautiful.

Close your eyes, and I will ensure they never again open.

I am the master of darkness, the stalker of shadows. I wear them as a cloak as I go on the hunt, tracking my prey while they are most vulnerable. Humans are weak in the night. I can slip into their homes undetected, to catch them while they are sleeping. My knife is sharp and I know where to strike; they never know what has hit them. Even those who are awake are easy targets. Their senses are compromised and they are easily afraid and startled. They can be tricked and manipulated, until they end up nothing more than a fly trapped helpless in the web of a spider.

Too easy.

Some attempt to hide, to disguise themselves elaborately, to surround themselves with traps or hire bodyguards. How many bodyguards will stand strong against a foe they cannot see, one who can appear invisible at will? Traps, disguises, even the most clever of hiding places will not prevent the inevitable. Nor will begging and pleading or bribery.

I am the scarred assassin, the bringer of death. I will hunt my prey to the very end of the world.

No one is a match for my blade.

Date: 2016-02-05 11:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] adoptedwriter.livejournal.com
Now I don't want to go to sleep tonight! AW

Date: 2016-02-06 12:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-love-freddie.livejournal.com
Yay! Sorry about that, but am so happy I got the creepiness I was going for. :)

Date: 2016-02-06 11:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliens.livejournal.com
i really enjoyed this piece and the last line was perfect!

Date: 2016-02-06 05:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-love-freddie.livejournal.com
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it! :)

Date: 2016-02-06 04:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] inteus-mika.livejournal.com
This almost feels like it could be an accidental intersection with [livejournal.com profile] ellison, where you're both painting vivid word pictures of a dark theme, each on either side. But, I also like the 1950s radio play / noir style, too... I can almost hear the advertisement now — "Not your average bedtime story; not for the faint of heart... don't listen alone!" A proper homage to a bygone era. Good job with this.

Date: 2016-02-06 06:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-love-freddie.livejournal.com
Heh, I didn't notice that, but you are right. It is always funny how that can sometimes happen.

Thank you for commenting, I am happy you enjoyed the piece. :)

Date: 2016-02-06 08:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eternal-ot.livejournal.com

Wow! Loved the last line..good job getting the creepiness right..well done.

Date: 2016-02-07 07:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-love-freddie.livejournal.com
Thank you! :)

Date: 2016-02-06 09:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
I do not want to meet your imagination at night! Wonderful descriptions!

Date: 2016-02-07 07:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-love-freddie.livejournal.com
Hehe you know, I think that is the best compliment I have ever received. Thank you, I am happy you enjoyed it. It was fun to write.

Date: 2016-02-07 07:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] whipchick.livejournal.com
(Shudder) this feels like a really strong character to build a story around!

Date: 2016-02-07 07:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-love-freddie.livejournal.com
For some reason, I love writing really dark characters!

Date: 2016-02-07 09:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] halfshellvenus.livejournal.com
It was creepy and poetic and glorious all at once. This isn't a style I've seen from you before, and I really liked it. You pulled it off well. :)

Date: 2016-02-08 06:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sinnamongirl.livejournal.com
It's like you're describing a nightmare come to life, excellent!

Date: 2016-02-08 06:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] prog-schlock.livejournal.com
I love it - it sounds like this character is the living embodiment of nightmares. I've had recurring dreams of somebody just on the edge of my vision stalking me - perhaps its the same guy.

This made me think of this song:

Date: 2016-02-08 07:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dee-aar2.livejournal.com
Uggghhhhh ... Creepy ... Its way past midnight here and I am not liking it one bit that I am up and reading !!!! Grrrr

Date: 2016-02-08 10:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] misfitmanor.livejournal.com
I've had some fun writing a couple different slasher serial killer characters before... I wonder how it would be to put them all in a dark alley together! ;)

~[livejournal.com profile] karmasoup

Date: 2016-02-09 12:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] murielle.livejournal.com
Creepy! Uber-scary! Dark! Spooky!

And so clever, but it's going to be just a little harder to fall asleep tonight.

Thank you. ;-)

Date: 2016-02-09 01:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] topum.livejournal.com
Wow. Scary but beautiful.


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